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One Kiss At A Time

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One Kiss At A Time

Postby NoCompz43 » Sat Sep 12, 2009 2:44 pm

These are just some lyrics that I wrote which just happens to be the only lyrics I've been able to put to music...

Verse 1
The story of a boy and girl.
Touching for the very first time.
But no one says it'll last.
Because teen-age love is so hard to find.
But I think they've found it.
Something neither of them have felt before.

Chorus
We'll prove them wrong,
Just one kiss at a time.
We'll show them there's more to us than it seems.
Just one kiss at a time.

Verse 2
Days have come and days have went.
Although too much time without you spent.
But my time with you keeps getting less and less.
And I know 4 years can seem like a lifetime.
But I know we'll get through it.
Just like we have always done.

Chorus
We'll prove them wrong,
Just one kiss at a time.
We'll show them there's more to us than it seems.
Just one kiss at a time.

Verse 3
And I know it's hard to manage.
Without each other there.
But I'll keep pushing on.
Just to make sure we're still together.
But whatever you do,
Please remember that I love you...

Chorus
We'll prove them wrong,
Just one kiss at a time.
We'll show them there's more to us than it seems.
Just one kiss at a time.
We'll prove them wrong,
Just one kiss at a time.
We'll show them there's more to us than it seems.
Just one kiss at a time.
Just one kiss at a time.
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Re: One Kiss At A Time

Postby AlakazamBrain » Sat Sep 12, 2009 5:28 pm

I have to say I quite like it. For the purpose the song has, it has some very nice elements to it.

If I had to give some suggestions, I recommend expanding the vocabulary used. Try and make the lyrics more poetic rather than prose. If this doesn't make sense, here is an example:

"Days have come and days have went.
Although too much time without you spent.
But my time with you keeps getting less and less.
And I know 4 years can seem like a lifetime.
But I know we'll get through it.
Just like we have always done."

"There have been sunsets, there have been midnights
I don't watch as often your sparkling lights
Now our souls are seeming to disappear into the dark
Love is an eternal journey we chose to embark
I know the we'll make it through the storm
'Cause our hearts have always kept us warm"

Obviously I don't expect you to take (or really like :P) any of what I have put down, but this was just to give you some thoughts. Basically, try and add a bit more imagery and "word painting" to the lyrics. Anyway, overall all, amazing work NoCompz!
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